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It was a rainy night. And there they sat together; the two people in the world who knew each other the best. But tonight, they never felt more apart. They were alone in the house. Valerie’s parents had gone in town, but trusted them to be together by themselves.
To this day, no one is sure how that night began the way it did, but they both knew how it had ended up. Valerie was in tears, and she couldn’t stop, not even long enough to talk or to catch her breath.
Alex held her. It was all he was able to do. He began to think in his head “Why am I doing this to her? She’s been so good to me.” and she had. She was there through thick and thin for him; when they fought, when he was depressed, which was quite often. And she was even there when he thought of suicide. That was probably the most painful of all to Valerie. All he knew, was that this was how he felt. He couldn’t bear to see her like this, but he also couldn’t bear to stay with her when he didn’t feel it anymore; when he didn’t love her like he used to. They hadn’t felt right for months, and there was someone else on Alex’s mind. All he could do was try to comfort her, with what little credibility as a boyfriend he had left.
“Don’t cry Val,” he whispered as she buried her face in his arms, “It’s okay. Everything’s alright.”
“No, it’s not,” she replied, looking him in the face and choking through her tears. “I’m losing you!”
Alex didn’t know what to say. He just stared back at her, feeling helpless, and she continued to cry. She cried until there were no tears left. Both of them knew, that if this wasn’t the end tonight, then it would come soon. It was only a matter of time.
:iconashoreneverreached:

Author's Comments

I wrote this a long time ago. I had always intended to finish it, and had even expanded upon it at one point, but everything else I wrote never seemed to fit with these first few paragraphs. It seems as though it will always be left unfinished and incomplete, much like the story within it, and will remain as only a fraction of a memory of a great love that was lost.

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:iconwakeyjakeyeggsnbakey:
alex is an asshole.
this is a very good start though. i'd say try to finish it!!

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the voice of the artist is the unconscious voice of the masses.
~brandon boyd
:iconashoreneverreached:
thanks jake...i kind of am alex...

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For my part I know nothing with any certainty, but the sight of the stars makes me dream. -Vincent van Gogh
:iconcrypticshadows:
I can relate to this. It's the worst feeling ever... knowing someone gave you everything & then you just abandon them in the end. Maybe it was meant to be left unfinished. Some of the greatest works are left that way. It keeps the mind churning.

haha I agree with Jake by saying Alex is an asshole. But then I would be hypocritical if I didn't say I am too.

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:frail:
:iconashoreneverreached:
yeah, alex is an asshole, but i suppose he was doing what he thought was right at the time...

thanks for the input!

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For my part I know nothing with any certainty, but the sight of the stars makes me dream. -Vincent van Gogh
:iconcrypticshadows:
Haha well emotions aren't really controllable. Sometimes we become evil without choice.

Sure thing.

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:frail:
:icondragon-kazooie:
lol....so jake think's you're an asshole. maybe that's why he skipped your party :-p

but nah, breaking up with someone doesn't make you an asshole.

It's good though, a brief glimpse into a sad moment, a hint at all the story behind it that isn't written.

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Hey you- don't help them to bury the light.
:iconwakeyjakeyeggsnbakey:
aww, i'm sorry...ya know, i considered that, but thought i was wrong...boo...now i feel bad...
does it help that its still a great beginning to a story?

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the voice of the artist is the unconscious voice of the masses.
~brandon boyd
:iconwakeyjakeyeggsnbakey:
p.s. that was me once (twice...) too...and i still feel shitty about it

p.p.s. how is the picture related?

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the voice of the artist is the unconscious voice of the masses.
~brandon boyd
:iconashoreneverreached:
eh, it's okay. i think the point was that i know i was an asshole. i paid for it in the end.

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For my part I know nothing with any certainty, but the sight of the stars makes me dream. -Vincent van Gogh

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